Hey there,

Im pretty sure most of you read my TRAGIC make of my first chapter "young heart" I know my faults already. Just need clarification and inputs if thats ok? Itll be most appreciated. *I hope you did*

OK I know my TONING is SHOCKING! lol dont need to be kind about it. If you noticed it was RUSHED I suck so much at it that I pray my drawings makes up for it ^^; SOOOOOO I was wondering if anyone can give me tips and advice on toning??? Also links where I can download some useful screentones??? ALSO on how to use it and WHEN...apparently I chuck it in any scene, ill even chuck in flowers in a fighting scene if I wanted too I know...HELP lol

Story wise seemed a bit fast??? Any input on what you guys thought would be nice. I like hearing critique, or how I should improve. I have the second part scripted, just need to find the time to draw it, is the hard part...so hopefully soon.

Also Im thinking on changing the title..."Young Heart" sounds to common >_<

The background where the school was pretty weird looking. What did you do to make it like that? And uh, for tonning I think you need to clean up your pages more before you can go on to tonning. I can still see the pencil marks and stuff. D: It can be fixed easily though with more easing (a tiring job, I know. TT^TT ) and Adjusting the Balance and Constance of each page. After that it should be much-O easy to clean up left over pencil lines if any. ^_^b

Now as for finding tons I think the best tip is to make your own. (Yeah, I’m no help here) I can’t give out any links cause I be a child block on my end but If you look up tones or manga tone brushes on DA I’m sure lots of stuff will pop up. And some ppl even go as to tell you how to make tones. Pretty spiffy stuff there. C: Hmmmm….. Where to use tones is always confusing. @__@; Just keep in mind that when a character or mood is light and happy use a light tone (Maybe like the flowers? ^_^ ) And if some thing is more of a heavy mood or dark feeling use darker tones. Gradient tones are best for stuff like that to use in my own opinion. And for battle scenes or showing movement speed lines are a must do. C:

I haven’t read your manga fully yet.(I have been meaning to. 8D;; ) I just flipped thought it.Hope I helps at least a little bit. x_x;; And YEAH! Go for an odd title! Some thing that stands out but still makes since for the story! d>w<b

Oh so true everything you just said, you pretty much summed up everything!

Thanks!

Now I know what to work on, and making my own tones??? Ill stick to downloading them till im confident enough to make my own! Thanks for thne advice though ALSO please do try reading my coic I woudnt mind knowing what you thought about it. I promise my next chapter will be better!

Ive finally came up with a UNIQUE name, ill tell you soon.

THANKS!