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 Post subject: What Did You Think??
PostPosted: Mon Aug 03, 2009 9:02 pm 
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What did you think of it?? What could I improve? I'd like to know!

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 Post subject: Re: What Did You Think??
PostPosted: Mon Aug 03, 2009 9:11 pm 
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I read the first chapter, and it seems pretty nice! ouo
I like Yuriko, she's so cute |D b And the tonining is really cool~
I think you could improve on the pacing, it seemed pretty fast and I couldn't really understand some parts. D: ;

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PostPosted: Tue Aug 04, 2009 8:53 am 
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Thank you!!

Hahaha, I think I did really cram stuff in because I wanted it to be less chapters, but thats not good thing to do so I have to work on that! Thanks!

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I like your work too. For now I don't think there is anything that needs to be improved particularly. The toning is nice and I like how you draw at many different angles/perspectives =D

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Thank you very much for telling me!

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I really liked reading the first chapter. I agree that it seemed a bit rushed but I got the idea behind it
and it was just the first chapter. I kind of half expected Yuriko to question the guy right away instead
of running off then just forgiving him. Idk, but you definitely have lovely art and you do a great job
with toning. I can't wait to see more ^^

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PostPosted: Sat Aug 08, 2009 9:23 am 
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Thanks!! I cant wait to keep drawing this story, I like it a lot!

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PostPosted: Thu Sep 03, 2009 6:21 pm 
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I thought story wise, needed to slow down a bit. Like everybody else said, but it was good I enjoyed it ^^

Artwise, your really good I especially loved the second page with your character in an olden day outfit. It looked professional in my opinion.

Great toning, nothing much to improve on just pacing.

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PostPosted: Sat Sep 05, 2009 7:56 am 
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Thanks~!♫

I usually make my stories soooo slooooowwwww and I was like 'well, I want this one to be shorter' so I made it faster :D hahaha I definately need to slow it down. Hopefully Ive done this in the second chapter.

I started to get a little worried, because right before I submitted the first chapter, somebody told me I should really cut down on the tone. But I love tone~! hahaha

Thank you very much for telling me!!

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Very nicely done! It's cute! >w< Just got through the second part. Pretty interesting story so far. What a cliffhanger though. I'm looking forward to when things work out.

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Thanks so much :D Im happy to hear that!! Im glad you enjoy reading it.

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